中学英语写作例讲

sp;  This afternoon an English lecture competition, whose title is Challenge the Future, was held in the multi-functional classroom． The competitors gave wonderful lectures in fluent English and won thunderous applauses．
    Compared with their English, I felt ashamed of my poor English． So I’ve made up my mind to study hard and I’m sure I can speak English as well as they do someday．

【习作点评】

写作要求：
请就下面故事写一篇120字左右的短文。
    从前，遥远山庄有一少年，酷爱读书。然而因家境贫寒，无钱买书。他听说远方有一户富人家收藏着各种书籍，乐交诚实少年。于是，少年长途跋涉，借书求知。富人说：“只要爱护书籍，及时交还，可随意借书”。
    历时多年，少年总是及时读完所借书籍，从不延迟交还。就这样，该少年博览群书，长大后成了大科学家。
习作原文：
    There was once an honest boy in a far away① mountain village． He was very fond of reading．But his family was too poor to buy him any books． Far away from the village there lived a rich man who had a library in which he kept all kinds of books． This man liked honest teenagers． When the boy learned it②, he walked a long way to visit him and asked the rich man to borrow③ him some books． “You can borrow any books as you like if only you keep them clean and return them on time④,” the man said．
    For many years the boy always finished to read⑤ the books in a given time and was never late in returning them back⑥． In this way the boy read a lot of books and when he grew up, he became a great scientist．
点评：
    本文写出了全部要点，层次分明，语言通顺，复合句用得不错。但有几处语法错误：①把 far away 改为faraway。faraway是形容词，意为“遥远的”，只能作前置定语，不能作状语。far away是固定词组，意为“很远”，只能作表语、状语和后置定语，如第4句。②it 改为 this。 it 代替前面提到的名词，而且与前面的名词指同一物。this 代替上文的内容。③把 borrow 改为 lend 。因为borrow 是“借入”，而 lend 是“借出”。④把 on time 改为 in time 。on time 是“准时”，指正好在规定的时间内，既不迟，也不早。in time 是“及时”，指按照预定的时间还有富余，可做些别的事情。⑤to read 改为 reading。 finish后只能用v-ing形式作宾语，不可用不定式作宾语。 finish reading意为“读完”。⑥把 back 去掉。因 return 意为“归还(give sth back)”。

【习作练兵】

1． 请根据中文提示，用英语写出下列故事。
    有位妇女心脏病犯了，去看医生。这位大夫是新来的，并不认识她。于是先问了她一些问题。其中一个问题是：“你多大岁数？” 她答道：“大夫，我记不起来了，我得好好想想。”她想了一会儿，然后说：“我现在想起来了，结婚时，我是18岁，我丈夫30岁。现在我丈夫60岁，这正好是30岁的两倍。所以我现在是18岁的两倍，那就是36岁。对吗？”
词数：100左右。
2． 请根据以下提示，写一篇120字左右的英文短文，介绍你的暑假生活。
  (1) 与祖父母在农村住了半个月；
  (2) 山和田野绿树成荫；
  (3) 有时去村西的小河洗澡，河水清澈；
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bsp; (4) 每天写日记；
  (5) 除了干农活以外，还帮助邻居的孩子补课；
  (6) 孩子们对英语感兴趣，读和写较好，但听不懂简单的英语。你每天早上帮他们提高听力和口语，他们进步很大；
  (7) 孩子们的家长赞扬你；
  (8) 农村需要知识。
                                                                                       
参考答案
1． A woman was having some trouble with her heart, so she went to see her doctor． He was a new doctor and did not know her, so he first asked some questions, and one of them was, “How old are you﹖”
   “Well,” she answered, “I don’t remember, doctor, but I will try to think．” She thought for a minute and then said． “Yes, I remember now, doctor！ When I married, I was eighteen years old and my husband was thirty． Now my husband is sixty, I know, that is twice t

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